ESSAY 12

SORU:

Many students have to live with roommates while going to school or university in a foreign country. While some prefer roommates from their own country, others prefer foreign students. Which choice would you prefer and why? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your response.

Bir çok öğrenci yabancı bir ülkede okula veya üniversiteye giderken oda arkadaşıyla yaşamak zorunda kalır? Bazıları yabancı bir öğrenci ile odalarını paylaşmayı tercih ederken, diğerleri kendi ülkelerinden öğrencileri tercih eder. Sizin tercihiniz ne olurdu ve neden? Spesifik sebepler ve detaylar kullanarak görüşünüzü destekleyiniz.

 

In these days, education is also an international event around the world as a result of that there are lots of foreign students in United States. Except education, these students also live here and have a place commonly dormitories and apartments near university. Choosing a roommate while starting a new university is a general concern for them.

Having a roommate from own counrty is the major choice of foreign students. If look from their view, it has got many advantages . Firstly, communication and understanding each other are the main necessities of living together so speaking the same language and becoming from the same culture lead to that. Secondly, being friend with someone who is from your own country is easier when you are abroad. When you go abroad for a long time, having a companion will make adopting a new life easier. When you feel alone and desperate, your companion will be there for you and will make you feel better. So it seems that there are really important advantages about having a roommate with same nationality.

On the other hand, living with an American roommate also have some advantages. Primarily, learning everything (about the school,new culture,people,traditions etc. ) will become easier. Roommates always eat together, drink together actually do most of the things together. So adopting the university is easy if you have an local roomates. Moreover, lectures are more simple for American students because of their education system and language advantage and if you have an American roommates. You can have some profit from it. So if you live in America for at least 3-4 years, you will adopt easily to new culture and university life.

In conclusion, choosing roommates is an important thing when you start a new life. Both having an American or having a student from your own counrty have different advantages for foreign students but in my opinion having an American one must be better for foreign students because of making adopting easier.

 

DEĞERLENDİRME:

In these days (bakınız: klişe), education is also (ek yaptığın bir cümle olmadığı için gereksiz) an international event around the world as a result of that (hatanı transitions notlarından öğrenebilirsin) there are lots of foreign students in United States. Except (Besides/In addition to demek istedin?) education, these students also live here and have a place commonly dormitories and (or) apartments near university. Choosing a roommate while starting a new university is a general concern for them.

Having a roommate from own (hatanı YOUR VERY “OWN” MISTAKES notundan öğrenebilirsin) counrty is the major choice of foreign students. If we look from their view (From their point of view), it has got many advantages . Firstly, communication and understanding each other are the main necessities of living together, so speaking the same language and becoming from the same culture lead to that (örnek ver veya olmazsa ne gibi sonuçlara yol açabileceğinden bahset). Secondly, being friends with someone who is from your own country is easier when you are abroad. When you go abroad for a long time, having a companion will make adopting (adapting) a new life easier. When you feel alone and desperate, your companion will be there for you and will make you feel better. So it seems that there are really important advantages about having a roommate with the same nationality (bunlardan önceki cümleleri firstly… gibi sıralamışşın ancak bu cümleleri arka arakaya yazmışsın. Cümlelerini desteklemek zorunda olduğunu, cümlelerinin birbirine fikir-anlam-destek açısından bağlantılı olması gerektiğini ve fikirleri sadece cümle cümle sıralayamayacığını unutma).

On the other hand, living with an American roommate also have (has) some advantages. Primarily, learning everything (about the school,new culture,people,traditions etc. ) (hatanı ETCnotundan öğrenebilirsin. Ayrıca “and” kullanmayı unutma. Parantez kullanma ) will become easier. Roommates always eat together, drink together, and actually do most of the things together. So adopting the university is easy if you have an local roomates (ya a local roommate ya da local roommates). Moreover, lectures are more simple for American students because of their education system and language advantage and if you have an American roommates. You can have some profit from it (and ile cümleyi daha da uzatmana gerek yok. Yeni cümle If ile başla: If you have an American roommate, you can benefit from it . An American roommate ya da American roommates olur. Ancak en önemli eksik bundan nasıl faydalanabileceğini söylememiş olman). So if you live in America for at least 3-4 years (long enough/for a specific period of time), you will adopt easily to (this/the) new culture and university life.

In conclusion, choosing roommates is an important thing when you start a new life. Both having an American or (and) having a student from your own counrty have different advantages for foreign students but in my opinion having an American one must be better for foreign students because of making adopting easier (because it makes adapting to a new environment easier. / because this makes it easier to adapt to a new environment. / because it makes the adaptation period for these students to a new country much easier.).

KELİME SAYISI: 330

GENEL DEĞERLENDİRME:

Essayinde klasik hatalar var bu da sitedeki notlardan faydalanmadığını gösteriyor. İlk önerim toefldersnotlari.com daki notları iyi çalışman ve daha sonra ipuçlarından faydalanarak yazmaya çalışmandır. Paragraf girişlerin şablona uygun. kelime sayısında sorun yok. Ancak bağlaçları daha iyi çalışman gerekir. Fikir tekrarları var. Fikirleri arka arkaya sıralama var. Her fikir belirttiğin cümle desteklenmek zorundadır, unutma. En önemli eksiklerden biri Thesis cümlesi. Tez cümlen kompozisyonunun en önemli cümlesidir. Tez cümlen olsa FAIR +, ancak puanın:

PUAN: FAIR -

 

TOEFL DERS NOTLARI DEĞERLENDİRME TABLOSU

 

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Test Rating

Scaled Score Range

GOOD

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GOOD -

4.0-5.0

24-30

28-30

24-27

FAIR

FAIR +

FAIR -

2.5-3.5

17-23

20-23

17-19

LIMITED

LIMITED +

LIMITED -

1.0-2.0

1-16

13-16

1-12

 

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